Notes

Title: I'll Be
Chapters: Oneshot
Reviewer: mikachannie



First Impression: (3/5)
I wasn't that hooked up with the title mainly because it was too simple for my mind to process. It wasn't that much appealing for me. Also, I hate to ask this but I really didn't get the idea of your title to the story that's why I deducted another point. Maybe you could do think of more creative titles.

External Forces: (8/10)
I love the simplicity of your oneshot. The fonts were good, it was just simple and it didn't made me confuse. Oh Oh. There's really much nothing to say. Just that I felt something wrong about the poster. It was too yellow-ish and it didn't entirely fit the mood of your whole theme.

Foreword : (13/15)
Your foreword was just one sentence. It summed up everything which was good but you could at least add more to it because I think it would be too plain. Yet, I enjoyed the poem. It was good and very charming for anyone.

Originality/Characterization : (20/20)
I love everything about the characters. Baekhyun wasn't brave at f irst but I'm glad he pulled up the courage to actually approach her. I liked how opposite some of their personalities show. And your story was somehow orginal. It was good and your idea was very realistic.

Plot /Flow of Story : (20/20)
I love your plot. Just like what I said, I loved your story. Although, I didn't liked how sad it ended because Jiyeon had to move away, it was very fulfilling to read. It was something worth reading. The attraction between Baekhyun and Jiyeon was something to look forward to, it was somehow impossible but it happened. You made it happen. I just hope they're going to meet in the future. lol.

Grammar / Spelling : (10/15 )
Although creative writing wasn't that much hard, its aim was to make your readers like and understand it and many writers do had some problems with it. I saw some spelling mistakes in your story, but you could totally improve it. There's also some issues with your use of active and passive voices. Have you ever heard about word clichés? You had some of it too, it was overly used that's why it's losing its impact. Maybe, you could consider revising some. Also, try not to use so much deep words. It would really help you connect with your readers more. I'm not saying it's not good to explore more words but sometimes, you kind of use it wrongly and had trouble with complex expressions. But you totally have a potential in writing. Just keep on writing!

Author's Technique : (14/15)
I overly enjoyed your oneshot.I'm serious! ♥ It was worth reading and after reading it, I was aiming for more. I love how you express the character's emotions through your charismatic style but you should carefully review your use of words.

Final Score : (88/100)