Notes

Title: Never Let Me Go (OneShot)
Chapters: 1
Reviewer: mikachannie

First Impression: (5/5)

Your title was homely yet common. It was really curiosity running through my mind when I first read it. Obviously, I was expecting for a dramatic story and I was satisfied that you didn't let me down. We catch our readers through our titles and giving them what they want or what they have expected is something of a bonus.

External Forces: (8/10)

Your poster was semi-perfect for the story, but it was a little too dark. Maybe, you need to lighten it up a bit since your beat wasn't that heavy. It was something romantic, longing and tender.

Foreword : (10/15)

You didn't have a foreword, description or something to introduce your story so I gave you a ten/fifteen. It's accepted since I can see that you're making a collection.

Originality : (10/10)

I have to give you a perfect score because I rarely see this kind of story. It was original in a way that you didn't make your readers predict what will happen.

Characterization : (10/10)

The characters did pretty well in showing off their personalities and actions. It wasn't aggravating and made me more curious.

Plot : (14/15)

I love the idea of your plot but it was missing on something. Maybe you could do a little more twists but I still loved it. I loved how Fei felt at ease in Chansung's arms. It was sweet and very hallowed.

Flow of Story : (10/10)

I like how you made your flow worth reading. When Chansung was leaving, I felt heartache for Fei. She was left alone, again.

Grammar / Spelling : (8/15)

I saw some of your spelling mistakes: interrupted, there's no undoubtly but instead it should be undoubtedly, dissappointed should be disappointed with one s, peoples' should be people's, civilization, there's no dumbfounding but dumbfounded, aggrivate should be aggravate. Also, you can check on your complex expressions. It should be appropriate in your scene like before using reveal, you could use, show instead. You should also work on using passive voices. I love how you describe distinctly to let your readers specifically feel your character deeply. Maybe, you should also avoid some words that just wasn't appropriate to use.

Author's Technique : (13/15)

I like your technique of making your readers feel the same amount of quality as your characters. It was fascinating.

Final Score : (83/100)