Notes

Team 4-
The premise of this draft reminds me of Depression Quest, as both put the reader in a certain POV and present choices that either further or worsen their condition. I like the emphasis on specialist-backed treatment and its importance, as the whole point is that bipolar disorder is controllable with support. However, in comparison to Depression Quest, this story implies that the POV already has a therapist and support. In Depression Quest, you start off with no support and resources and as you continue, you get the option for choices like therapy and medication. Personally, that's a big part of improvement for one's mental health journey (recognizing that something's wrong) and also presents more symptoms and daily events for the reader. Whether you choose to do that with your story is up to you, but it would help to provide backstory and details about bipolarism for people who are less aware of the symptoms/effects (especially before help). Either way, I like the draft and research put into it. Keep it up!

Team 7-
I like the draft/concept of this! Mental health topics and apocalyptic settings tend to work together because the stressful situation pushes people to their limits, and I like the tie-in with Depression Quest. The multiple endings are interesting, and I like how even though the "good" ending results in the main character's survival, the emotional and mental consequences make it more realistic. In terms of the storywriting of the draft, I think it would be necessary to have some intro details regarding the main couple, kind of like in Depression Quest where there are links that give backstory. It doesn't have to be too detailed, but having that backstory will help with the emotional attachment and in setting the tone for the characters when disaster strikes. Otherwise, good work!

Team 2-
I like the idea of making political choices, as it has more weight and consequences to the story. Obviously, the draft is not finished so I'm not sure which choices affect the ending, but I can sort of tell where they can possibly go (acceptance of the Madtraddai or deportation). I was confused over certain story beats like how the Madtraddai produce drugs for an unknown reason. There's also the fact that in your summary, there's a love story, which isn't present in the actual draft. I'm not sure how it could be implemented since this is from the perspective of a mayor (unless the mayor falls in love with a Madtraddai, which seems against their job and would definitely be a diplomatic issue). Whether you all choose to include it is up to you, but that will probably be later down the road as the draft is fleshed out. Regardless, good work!