Notes

An hour later, Sophie came through the door. She didn't know about my injuries yet, but she was going to find out. She was looking down at her phone when she came into the living room, where I was. She laughed at something but I wasn't sure what it was. But the smile didn't last long, because when she looked up from her phone, she saw me. It melted from her face and she got more emotional than my mom did. "Dylan, what happened?' She asked. "Nothing..." I answered back. I don't know why I was still trying to hide it at this point, but I did anyways. "Dylan, I swear to god, if you don't tell me wha-" She was interrupted when Ulti came in through the door eating a cookie. "Hey Dylan, these cookies are good, we should buy some." Sophie gave him the death stare for a moment until he realized something was wrong. He then looked at me and dropped his cookie. "Oh shit, Dylan, you're hurt!" I stared at him blankly. "No shit, Sherlock." About 4 seconds later, we both burst out laughing for whatever reason. Sophie interrupted us. "Guys, this isn't the time! This is serious!." I then realized Sophie was about to kill me if I didn't tell her what was going on. Guys, come with me. There's something I need to tell you both... I took them into my room, locked the door, and told them everything...

>"serious!." double punctuation
>no quotation marks around speech when dylan is talking at the end
>no fair dylan's room has a lock on it :(
>did ulti not take his cookie in dylan's room
>waste of cookie
>where did he get that cookie and if he has some at his house why is he telling dylan they should buy some
>dylan's friend is a cookie thief
>if ulti can easily get in the house, so can burglars
>separate dialogue pls long paragraphs aren't necessary