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THE CONVERSATION REFERENCING THE FIRST CHAPTER
THE "WHAT, WHAT?" "YOURE LOOKING AT ME" "WELL YEAH IM TALKING TO YOU"
SFSHKGDJFHJSDFHGSDHBFKNMDKJLHKGFJJHW!JK#J1KL#HJK!JL:K!L;KL!?!?!??!@!?@?!@!K@?!??!?!??!?!??!?!?!??!?!? /POS
I REMEMBER THE MOMENT I READ THAT I FUCKING SCREAMED OUT LOUD FJKDLSHKGJ I CANT BELIEVE I FORGOT TO SAY IT IN THE COMMENT
The thing I most love about it, is how different both scenes feel. Although it's almost the same dialogue, their relationship has very clearly changed since the first one.
1st:
Sapnap notices, keeps looking at him.
"What?" he says.
George raises an eyebrow, "What, what?"
Sapnap shrugs, "You're like- lookin' at me dude."
"Well yeah, I'm talking to you?"
Sapnap shakes his head, drinks his smoothie and leans back, "Whatever man," he grins, more than a little awkward. George grins back, drinks his coffee.
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George raising an eyebrow, sap stumbling over his words, all indications of a kinda uncomfortable situation. George asking "I'm talking to you?" as if it were a judging question, it's all way more uncomfortable, plus the "whatever man", as sap trying to brush off the weird moment, it just seems like an overall awkward interaction.
2nd:
“What?” George grins.
“What, what?”
“You’re looking at me.”
“Well yeah, I'm talking to you.”
George rolls his eyes, rubs his face with the back of his wrist, “you’re so annoying,” he grins. Sapnap grins back.
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BUT HERE. OH, HERE. THE LOVE IN THIS IS JUST AAAA MY HEART <3 Like it's crazy but you can actually FEEL the affection in their words. Instead of raising an eyebrow, george is smiling. Then sap doesn't ask it like a question, more like a statement, for some reason it seems really sweet in this context. And then george rubbing his face and joking at sap AND THEN THEY BOTH SMILE AT EACH OTHER, ASLJKFHJGDSGK?!?@//!?@
It's so incredibly sweet, and it really is a fucking banger example of how much subtle changes in their tone can change so much the feel of a scene. The second one feels much more secure, like they know what they're doing and feel comfortable with each other. You've done such an incredible job at showing the progression of their relationship with each other <3
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